Thursday, 30 July 2009

Floodgates

He sat there, staring into space, fingers twitching nervously. It just sat there next to him, saying nothing, doing nothing.

He cradled his head in his hands, rubbing his eyes, trying to erase the images. His hands were shaking now. The visions took over.

Sitting there on the porch, he lit his first ever cigarette.

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Ki said...

Is this 55 fiction? (I didn't have the patience to count.)

It's good though, very good.

:)

Sparkling said...

Wow! I could almost feel his mood :)

How are you?

Jhayu said...

@ Ki.
Yes, yes, we learnt a little something from you as well. And dengue. Malaria also.

Jhayu said...

@ Sparkling.
Damn. Only almost? Me still needs work, then.

And I'm great! Erm, have we met? =p

Ki said...

Aha, so you read the 55 fiction then?

Preeti said...

vivid. and the best part is that the emotions are so palpable that the face is a blur. so many times we tend to featurize characters with familiar faces. that did not happen here. because it was so highly charged with the varied turmoils that everything else ceased to matter.
extremely good. me liked. :-)

PS: GAP III, IV, V... where art thou???

Preeti said...

Its STILL...
sorry SPARKLING....i couldn't resist it!!!!
:p

Preeti said...

by the way....it is 55 words and 13 characters.
and it reminded me a lot of Purgings... although purgings scared the shit out of me.

and all these thoughts and afterthoughts, Eternal Knight, maketh their way out of the heart only to shine above you like starlight on nights when sleep evades and darkness descends...

PS: I think I'm back!!!! :p

Jhayu said...

@ Ki.
I'm known to stalk certain parts of the internet, yes. =p

@ The Maiden.
As always, your comment leaves me speechless.
And that's an excellent question I wish I knew the answer to.

And WHAT????

@ Sparkling.
What are you? Kinds of water???

Preeti said...

WHAT????

Jhayu said...

@ The Maiden.
You are, most definitely, back.

fishbowl said...

Fantastic, the mood you've created.

Avantika A. said...

Autobiographical?

Jhayu said...

@ The Blue Fish.
Dengue!

@ Avantika.
Yes and no. Let's call it dramatized autobiography.

Ki said...

Yay. :)

Deepali said...

Hehe I was wondering if you started smoking and what pushed you off the edge lol.

Nicely done :)

workhard said...

Nice expression of emotions...


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